4.5 stars for the characters
Ah, compared to your thorough and helpful review for my story, I hope I can return the favour. As I had hoped, I finally finished Cost of Revenge before the end of August. :P
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If Inkitt could have half ratings, overall, I'd give 4.5 stars to Cost of Revenge. I'm kind of a sucker for anti-heroes (or just plain ol' villains) in novels/TV shows if they're well written. It might be their charm or personality but they have that one quality that makes you hate to love them.
--- CHARS: For Dominic, he wasn't entirely to blame for the war he started but like I've noticed in another review, I would have liked to see more interactions between Dominic and his friends while growing up in Gelbraun. Whether it was in the form of flashbacks or entire chapters themselves before he learnt the truth about his birthright since I enjoyed reading the banter between him and Jimmy in Ch 1. That being said, I liked the secondary characters a lot and my favourites would have to be Brigham & Josie. It'd be cool to see more of Larissa too since she was quite mysterious (as fortunetellers should be) and Willow was interesting as well. Sometimes, I'd hate Dominic but then love his people but then I also sided with Cassidy and Daemyn at times but hated Pierce. So, I think you did a great job with your characters with all their complexities.
--- SETTING: I'm terrible at remembering the names of kingdoms in fantasy novels unless I'm shown a map haha. But anyway, it was a neat to see the kingdoms divided based on eye/hair colour. Out of curiosity, is the climate in the region similar if these different kingdoms only have different eye/hair colour but the same skin colour?
--- MISC: Even though the basic idea is revenge, I found that your descriptions of the war and battle scenes well done. I can't write fight scenes properly haha, so all the battles scattered throughout the story were engaging to read.
Lastly, there were some typos I spotted which I'll leave in the comments in case someone else hadn't mentioned them already. Anyway, terrific job on your first novel! It was well thought out and I look forward to future works. ^_^