A Goblin's Mind
This reminds me of something...a movie perhaps with Marlon Brando...I'm not quite sure. Perhaps it's only because this clever story is base on a mysterious island. I love that a group of mythical creatures are receiving therapy, it's quite entertaining. They were all quirky, and humorous which made them relatable. I don't like to leave reviews with spoilers so I won't get into detail about your plot twist but I loved it. Maybe I'll email you about it. ;)
I must say I was a little let down by the ending only because I wanted more...again don't want to leave a spoiler. Ah! I just remembered what it reminded me of...The Island Of Dr. Moreau! Minus the creepy science experiments.
Anyway, this was an extremely clever, and fun read! Cheers!!!
Sooo, you have only two chapters but the very first one had me drawn in before I could understand what was happening! Your writing is very descriptive and beautiful. Particularly your last sentence of chapter two when you are describing the way the fire lit the room. I loved that.
I have added this story to my reading list, so I am excited for more chapters.
I will add more to this review as chapters are added. :)
I Was Hooked
This was really amazing. Your pacing was perfect, I have issues with slow paced stories that take forever to get to the point but this book had no issues with that. You took supernatural elements and twisted them into something interesting and profound. It took about three days to finish it but honestly I could have finished it in a night because I didn't want to stop reading. A tale of a brothers love for his sister. I love it.Read the story now
An Incredible Adventure
I actually liked this. I liked the characters point of view and I find it hard to get into a first person story but the attitude portrayed here kind of keeps you reading. It's foul but almost insightful. It just seems so realistic, from him telling the Anarchist to F-off, to his description of an over processed hotel breakfast. I don't think I've EVER read a story like this on Inkitt, or anywhere.
From the very first paragraphs this story draws you in. It's action packed, dark and a bit gritty. I don't usually read stuff like this but I have to keep going.
Your writing is polished and flows well, it's very easy to read and I found myself rarely hung up on sentences. I'm only a few chapters in where The Rat get's jumped. I love that by the way, your names for the gangs and characters.
I'm gonna keep reading now.
I love how you explained that women didn't need to evolve to survive. Powerful. I think your plot is VERY strong and I'm happy there is a second book to this one. However I do feel sometimes with your descriptions you tend to list things off instead of letting them flow. Your characters are strong and well developed, from their relationships with one another to their issues. I really like this story! Some sentences do get a bit choppy because of over used commas, I do this too, to try and slow down the scene but I've been told it can frustrate or distract the reader.
Over all, well done! I hope you go far in this contest.
This was an enchanting tale and it made me wish I had a sister growing up. What an adventure they went on, I don't want to be a spoiler so I wont go into detail. The characters were so quirky and in depth, I loved Ms. Plumlee, the goofy ol' bat. Your writing style was so easy to read and you did a great job of making me feel like I was in the book. I really loved this story. The only thing is, there should have been more sadness for grandma when she passed, but I do see why it was short of skipped over. Other than that it was AWESOME.Read the story now
No Ones Charm
It's an interesting concept, shapes are used to define a person, and who their match will be. Your characters are witty, and a few times I found myself laughing. I'm not quite finished with it. It gets a little slow and there are quite a few mistakes that I kept getting hung up on, which makes it hard to read at times. For the most part though the writing flows well, particularly with the dialog. Way to many exclamation points and bold drawn out words that are unnecessary particularly in the first chapter (Which I'm not gonna lie, it almost made me stop reading it) it gets a little excessive. I totally like the idea you have and you have a lot of potential, so keep writing and challenging yourself.
A Womans Trouble
Some parts of the story are hard to read. Not because it's bad, but because it's detailed and sad. Keona's story is heart wrenching, from her being beaten and betrayed, to trying to get it right. This is not usually the kinds of books I like to read but it pulls you in. Great job on that! I'm curious to see where it goes, seeming as how you haven't finished it yet. Hopefully you keep updating with new chapters.Read the story now
I love this story.
I think the humor of Elma is so relatable and I found myself laughing out loud as I read this book. The mysteriousness and seriousness of Tristan Hendry made for one of the most interesting characters of this story (probably of any character I have read about in a long time) and I can't help but want to know absolutely everything about her.
The first scene with Roan the Vampire is really what kept me reading further, he is so intriguing, old world, and hilarious.
All in all, well done! I can't wait to continue this story. I truly enjoy your work.
This is wonderful writing, it flows so smoothly. Your first chapter was very captivating, I loved your description of Mrs. De’Costa, how you mentioned her crows feet and how she was her husbands poetry. I thought it was beautiful and captivating. I have yet to finish it, I still have to read the epilogue, but well done. Thank you for suggesting your story and I really think it deserves five stars.Read the story now
I love the first line of this book. 'I call myself a half orphan, never knew my father,' It kind of pulls you in. The plot is interesting and makes you want to keep reading and the description is great. I could see everything the author wanted to portray. There were a few grammar issues and your sentence structures need improvement. (I am guilty of this as well) which is why I suggest Edit, edit, and edit again. Auto-crit is a great editing tool because lets face it, there is only so much editing we can do ourselves before our words start running together. Thank you for suggesting your book, I will continue to read it! And please keep writing!Read the story now
From the first sentence I was interested. There was a lot of telling vs. showing (I'm guilty of this too) but I felt what she was feeling. I was sad, scared and curious. It brought me back to when I was a teenager and that awkward pain of being different and having personal issues. I will be continuing to read this as I am only a few chapters in. Please keep writing. Write, write, and write some more, you have so much potential.Read the story now
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