A Half Orphan
Okay folks, let's put a real review out here. I have only read one, and I am about to agree with what was said.
The plot has been done to death, and that is not a bad thing. It is all about execution.
A Half Orphan has the potential to be a good story if it were not rushed. The character names are confusing. You almost need to write them down in order to keep track.
In fourteen chapters, I see a story that has so much emotional potential, but I get more show than tell. This could have easily been a thirty chapter book.
Punctuation fluctuations (read it and you will see what I mean), paragraph errors, non-consistency. The author is not a natural English speaker, so I can understand.
One cannot write a novel on their own no matter how much they think they can. One needs guidance and attention to learn about bad habits, and how to develop new ones.
I am done with this review. Read the book, and you too will be asking many questions.
Two thumbs up for The Last Wizard!
This has got to be one of the best books I have read in a while. The characters are both amazing and mysterious. The story moves along with artistic precision pulling you in chapter by chapter. Brynn is a perfectly normal teenage girl, though in her time, she is old enough to be married. She is a very brave girl that takes on something she doesn't understand, but does it so she can discover if her cousin was murdered.
Zadicayn is a little weird at first, but he quickly grows on you. I was so sad when I got to the end of the book, and there wasn't anymore. I hope the author gives us more soon. I am really excited to see what is going to happen next.
There was only one thing that bothered me. Zadicayn spoke Old English, and Brynn was sixteen years old in the mid-1800's. Both of them said the word "Yea". I'm not sure if it bothered me more that they were saying it or it was spelled wrong (should be Yeah). But every time I saw it, it made me think of some kid walking around in 2017.
Other than that, this is a wonderfully written book, and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
As far as content is concerned, I will say one word. WOW! This author totally captured my attention from prologue to epilogue. The research as well as personal experience that went into writing William's first novel was great. First novel, yes, I did say that. This book is well worth reading. I loved it. Honestly, when I got to the end, I found myself wondering about more adventures with William and his little family. That is up to the author, but I would love to see some more, even just a little.
That being said, there are some serious grammatical errors that need to be addressed. One of them being the ending seems a bit rushed. Once these are corrected, this story will be a contender. Read William Jordan, an Assassin's Tale. I am absolutely certain you will enjoy it.
I started this story with high hopes. It was a featured story this week, and I thought I would check it out. The Blurb was interesting enough to grab my attention. I have only read two chapters and well, let's just say I am going to keep reading because I want to see where this is going. The author put it in the category of Romance. I'm finding none of that so far (only on chapter 3 at this point). Humping your college boyfriend does not a romance make. Erotica should definitely be a sub genre. There are several grammatical errors. Missing words, things that should be plural are not (missing the "s" at the end of some words). Insane disconnect within chapters. Meaning the story does not flow as it should as far as the beginning goes. However I am going to keep reading.
I will give a full review when I am done. There is great potential here, but the author needs to learn a bit about themselves before they are serious about their craft. If they are serious at all.
Okay, so I finished the story. I am still convinced that this is Erotica verses Romance. Selena is almost a love slave to Caleb. The author talks about their previous relationship many times, Though Caleb is not the same man he was on the outside, deep down, he still loves Selena. So my suggestion is if the author wants to make this a real romance, it needs a little less bump and grind, and a little more emotion. The story needs to be fleshed out. I'm not sure that I was fond of female bodyguards either.
However, the story still has promise. The plot is good, but still needs some work.
Well, I will say this. It was a good book, that kept me engaged. I don’t mind the genre because really, if the book is good, I will read just about anything. However, for me there were some parts that seemed disjointed. Almost like an original thought started and was completed, but there was no lead into the next scene sometimes. But for the most part the story had a good flow. All the characters are likable. Though I wish I would have gotten to know more about Barney. The punctuation and grammar was good, with nothing standing out that hinders the reading of this book. All in all, it is a pretty good read, and I enjoyed it.Read the story now
First let me say that I am a real reader. I read books like I listen to music. In my music library, you will find Chopin, Meatloaf, Marilyn Manson, Michael Jackson, Duke Ellington…You get what I am trying to say. I read books like I listen to music. Drama, Fantasy, Romance, Action…Whatever it may be, but all that matters to me is that I am entertained. No matter the genre, if the book is good, I will read it.
Here on Inkitt, I have found good stories that need a little work, I have found those who need lots of work, and yes, there is some real garbage out there (that is my own opinion).
Let's get to it, shall we?
Vestige. What does the word even mean? Merriam-Webster gives two definitions. Look it up. LOL!
The story starts out exciting enough, you have no idea what is really going on, but you keep reading because the author wants you to. The monsters…the cure…What the heck is the author talking about? You read on, hoping to gain some answers.
I went through all thirty-three current chapters enjoying them the whole time. Shep is a mystery. Though now knowing his connection with Aurelia, his mystery is slightly less as far as his personal connection is concerned. Still would like to know what his true abilities are. We get that he is strong, but need more.
Hate that a main character dies before we really get to understand his role and his feelings towards his peeps.
I could go on for days about this story, but I will not ruin it for everyone.
Thirty-three chapters of greatness. The occasional (and so slight if you are in the story you will miss it, occasional) grammatical error is there. There is a disconnect in the beginning between past and present. But it does not take away from the story.
I now sit and wait until Kassidy figures out where she wants to go with this. Thirty-three chapters of OMG! Then silence.
Amazing story, could use some grammatical fixes, but loved it nonetheless.
Reminded me of a few stories
The Hunter Series - Penelope reminded me of several books that I have read. One being a series that I read on Wattpad. It was a good book, but it needs to be fleshed out. There are things that I would have liked to see happen. Mainly the relationship between Issac and Penelope. Since Issac is her soul mate, there should be a connection that we as readers must feel. Their relationship was rushed, as were so many other things. Though Penelope is twenty-one, some of her dialog and relationships come across as she was a teenager. I had to keep reminding myself that she was twenty-one. Eleanor was a character that needed to be fleshed out. There is an extreme disconnect between her in the beginning of the book, and her in the end of the book. Without giving anything away, her change should have been a little more gradual.
The grammar and punctuation was good with the exception of an occasional missing word.
Overall I enjoyed the book, just wish it was a little longer.
The fifth John Sutherland novel that I read was set in modern day. I was excited. John is a very good story teller, and I was looking forward to something totally different from his period pieces. Though the story is readable and very easy to follow, there were no unpredictable moments. I'm not sure why that was. A modern day story from this caliber of writer should have blown me away, but it didn't. The writing is so formal; it read more like a period piece out of place.
There was a bit of excitement with the bear. It broke the story up enough to get a different perspective, but when the bear was out of the picture, the story was more of the same.
The love that is shared between the two main characters is so sweet; it comes across as desperation in some parts. It's almost like they would die if they weren't in each others presence for more than five minutes. Yes, there was a reason they were so attached to each other, and there was just a bit of conflict in the beginning between the two, but after that initial conflict, there was nothing left but sugar.
Love isn't always sugar, and I think that is where I had a problem with this story. With the story being focused on both struggle and attraction, there had to be some conflict that came with the struggle, and there was none.
So, Loss of Innocence is an okay tale, that is lacking a few elements (unusual for John). I personally prefer his historical romance after reading this.
The fourth John K. Sutherland novel that I have read, made me just say, hmm. I said this throughout the book. Why was the question that ran through my head several times. But I later found out why. Did I always like the why? No. I thought that this book could have gone in a different direction with the same ending. Don't get me wrong, it is an entertaining read, but there are some things that I would have done differently.
Multiple characters will keep you on your toes. Three different stories eventually come into one, and it is magical. That I definitely liked.
The grammar and punctuation in this one was great as usual, very few mistakes. I will say that though this is an earlier novel (I am reading another J. K. Sutherland as we speak), the same holds true as with the other three I have read. Main characters tend to talk way too much when they should be holding a conversation with the person, we as readers know, are in the room with them. I still haven’t figured that out.
But I will not hold anyone back from reading this one. Not as good as the other three I read, but still worth reading.
John is amazing.
Five stars for Selena
This was a very good story. However, one of the characters just really got on my nerves. I am not sure if the author intended the character to be that way, but she was insanely annoying.
I was happy that particular character didn't have too many scenes or I wouldn't have been able to finish the book. The main character, however, I really liked. There are some bits of dialog that are repeated in back to back paragraphs, only written slightly different. Didn't notice it until the one character that annoyed me just kept going on and on. Ugh! I digress.
This historical fiction romance is well written (you know it is because of my feelings towards one character). John's books generally are well written, and yes, this is the third one of his I have read. If you are a fan of historical fiction, he is a good author to read.
In the beginning of the book, I would have loved to see more interaction between the main character and his brother, but that is not what the story is about, and I understand that. For the brothers to be twins, I guess I was just expecting a bit more interaction between them, but again, that is not what the story is about.
I literally only caught a few missed periods, and that's it as far as grammar and punctuation go. Because the author is so good at it, anything missing stands out like a sore thumb. But like I said only a few missed periods. Everything else, dare I say, perfect.
The story is an awesome read. You will be curious about what is going to happen, then cheer for the main character when he returns from his journey. The last few chapters of the book will make you want to know how it is going to turn out. I'm not going to say anything other than, read it, and find out.
Now, I am on to the next John Sutherland novel. Hopefully I will be just as entertained as I have been with the three I have read.
Awesome plot idea. I will be honest and say I could not make it past chapter 2 for many personal reasons (and yes, I read EVERYTHING). But I will say the plot is a cool idea. The author just needs to work on the beginning of the story to pull in those peeps who are not fans of classic rockers. I was interested and bored at the same time if that makes any sense. Bored eventually took over, and I stopped reading (Did I mention, I read everything?). For me, something different needs to happen in the first two chapters of this book to make me move on. Others seem to love it, but just not my cup of tea.Read the story now
John Does It Again
Of course I might be a little bias. I love historical fiction. The Caroline takes place just after the Civil War; though through most of the chapters you may forget that if your mind is anything like mine. It just flows naturally, as a story should.
Wyatt is a man who lost his love. Caroline lost her love as well, though the loss is different in each others eyes. For one of them, love lost is possibly recoverable. For the other, love is just a memory.
I am so not going to give up the plot on this one. But I will say, it will drive you nuts. You will keep saying, "OMG! Why?" LOL. You thought I was going to say something, but not!
John has the ability to bring two young people together like no other. The romance in this one and his other story that I have read, The Belvedere, is true storybook, historical romance. I will continue to read this author, because he has a tendency to hold my attention on my long commute to work. I read everyday, so I read quickly (well it is a normal pace to me, but peeps say I read fast).
John Sutherland will say to you that he is not brilliant. I know. I have had this conversation with him. To me, he is brilliant.
Read, The Caroline, to judge for yourself. Do you have an author that you will read anything they write? I did until my favorite author passed away. Slowly but surely, John is taking their place.
There are very few flaws as far as grammar, however, in this one paragraphs tend to be a little long. Easily remedied.
Loved this book as well as the other I read. I will recommend this to anyone who loves period pieces. It will make you smile.
I loved this story from beginning to end. I don't think I have ever read anything quite like it before. I totally got caught up in Tom's mission. I loved the meticulous details that he went through to find the twins. Then his woman gives him the best idea. I giggled and thought, "yup, just like a woman." I was quite shocked to find out that Tom as careful as he was to keep to himself, he was being watched the whole time. I know the story is about Tom and Sacha finding the twins, but I would have liked to see the relationship between the twins and thier mother.
The paragraphs are way too long. They need to be broken up into smaller paragraphs so it is easier to read. Also I noticed that you started the beginning of a sentence with a number instead of being written out. When number are at the beginning of a sentence, they should always be spelled out. Twelve, and not 12. The ellipsis is three dots, if that was your intention.
Other than that, this is some good stuff here, I can't wait for more!
Mike Remmes' first romance is filled with sex, memories, and emotions. His main character, Brooke, is a young girl who has more than a fleeting obsession with sex. At seventeen, she seems to enjoy the thrill of being caught doing something dirty, than the act of sex itself. This makes you wonder what or who she is going to do next, and what is the reason.
Brooke has lived the last three years of her life dead set on revenge. I will not spoil it and say why, but it seems to consume her throughout the entire book. Brooke goes through a lot. She is a foster kid that has been in the system for a long time and she has a hard time trusting. Eventually she finds someone to trust (again, not telling who that is). Brooke could be fleshed out a bit, but I really enjoyed the story.
Now for the technical. Grammar and punctuation need work. There were some cases where a letter made all the difference in the word. What bothered me most? Sometimes there is disconnect between chapters. The disconnect sometimes it makes it hard to continue the flow that you had going. Basically, you read a chapter, and then the next chapter you have to start off with something new.
With a good editor, Remmes' first romance could be amazing. Right now it is a good story that needs some work.
Hoorah for Alex!
Another winner with Live Again! I picked up this book simply because it was written by Alex. I read her other novel, and loved it as well. This short novel is filled with action, along with deep rooted pain. The scenes are well written and very descriptive.
The main character, Jack, is young and troubled, and because of the way Alex works her magic, you feel every bit of what he is going through. Grammar and punctuation are almost perfect (Very hard to find something wrong).
The only thing I had an issue with this book is it has a sub-genre of romance. Sadly there are one or two chapters where Jack is with his love interest. Not necessarily qualifying this as a romance in my eyes. Perhaps if it was longer, and we got to know more about the love interest, the sub-genre would work. So perhaps I would re-categorize the sub-genre to action and not romance. But other than that, great work once again Alex!
Hooray for James and Harriet!
I became interested in this book because it was written by a man. I thought no way could a guy write romance. Well, I was proven wrong. I loved the innocence of Harriet and the patience of James. The author writes with such elegance and his characters just come to life. They are very well defined, so it makes it easy to fall into the pages of this novel. The descriptions of the scenes will put you there if you allow yourself to go.
Harriet's innocence is endearing. I think between her and James, she is definitely my favorite. I would have loved to know more about James' mother and sister. Mrs. Ward seemed to be a woman who loved her children, knew what they were capable of, and wouldn't waste anytime chastising them if they were in the wrong. It was refreshing to meet James' mother. I liked her. This is an amazing story of innocent love that just doesn't happen in this time.
In some chapters, thoughts, or spoken dialog repeats itself. Almost like the author was reiterating what was already said. I'm not sure why that was, but it was only a minor inconvenience as I wanted to move along with what was going to happen next. But if you want to travel back in time where women were polite and demure, and men were gentlemen all of the time, read The Belvedere. Fantastic work.
This story has sooo much potential! The plot is amazing. Almost makes me want to write a story with a similar plot.
This one, way too short. With the way the author set up the story, so many things could have happened. There could have been an ultimate betrayal all the way through the story with Leon making good on his threat was one thought. In my head, the story would have ended sadly, but it would have been an incredible read.
Another character (who I will not mention in order to not to spoil the story) could have finished his thought, as deranged as he is.
Two men vying for the same woman is always an incredible read, and I'm always excited on who finally gets the girl.
I have no idea on how to say this, but I will try. The story started off with an explosion and ended up flat. The build up was huge, but it actually ended up very disappointing. What this story needs is a huge fleshing out, and well it was not there.
The only way to explain this is the author got lazy, or bored. Written correctly, this story should have been no less than thirty chapters, but it did not happen. So angry that I opted for this and not something else.
The title says one thing, and you get something else. Looking for real Bulletproof Kisses? Look somewhere else.
Good, but not great
The Enforcer. Wow, powerful title. Gets 100k peeps insanely interested. Is that what the author wanted? The fame? This book will keep you engaged. The main character has no clue what she wants. At least that is the way I felt. She constantly fights with herself and her wolf. Cool at first, it sets the tone, but after a while not so much.
Her potential mate is tall, buff, and sexy. Does she want him? It may seem so, but it never comes to pass is fifty-three chapters.
This book has insane potential if the author could just focus on one thing at a time. I mean it could at least be a three book series if the author could just focus. Yes, the story is good but it lacks patience.
The relationship between the main character and her best friend is the most defined in the book, and even then it falls flat at times.
The main character is so stubborn for a woman, it is almost unnatural. What does she really want in her life? In fifty-three chapters, I still have no idea.
Okay, enough said. Romance is one of the genres that this book fell under. I don't get romance from this. What I get is a spoiled rotten, extremely stubborn grown woman who can't get away from her past.
I can see ideas in the author's head that were brilliant; only to be distracted by whatever struck her fancy at the time.
The humor is great and perfectly timed, but still missing the focus that would make those scenes even more powerful.
Basically there are scenes left unfinished in my mind. Does Hill love Hercules? I mean come on. You think she does, after all this time, but she is so busy being a selfish stubborn bitch, you want to slap her.
With all of that said, read the book. Help the author. The story has an insane amount of potential if there was some real focus.
The Hurting Game
Well, first of all, for those looking for dystopian, look somewhere else. The title is close to a familiar series, but no. This story, written by an amazing author, is unique, and extremely engaging.
The beginning of the first chapter will have you wondering, should I continue? The beginning of a story is, most of the time, questionable to the reader. But we press on.
Many have said, "This is not the type of story that I would normally read…" But how in the hell would you know this is not the type of story that you normally read, if you don’t read it? But many have. They, like me, were quite surprised.
The main character of the story is young, going through something he is not aware of until other things happen to him. Then, all hell breaks loose within him. No spoilers!
He reunites with an old acquaintance, and the two of them go on a ride that will keep you on the edge of your seat. Happy, sad, pissed, relived, and everything in between. Those are the emotions you will feel, and not necessarily in that order.
This story is amazing…Oh, I said that already. Seriously it is. There are some things that the trained eye can see grammatically. But they are so far and few between, I should have really kept my mouth shut. But without fail, they are there.
I am going to join the crowd when they say the fight scenes are realistic and visual. They are! When you pick up this book, be prepared to be on the street in the rain, or in an apartment watching TV. You will be transported if you have focus. I don’t remember where the story took place, but I am there. Iziah is young and amazing. A bad ass that does not listen. Reward or not, he is who he is. I loved it.
Okay, so I have opened my mouth enough for now. Read the book. Huge story beyond the first chapter. Give this author a read or two. I promise you will love this.
When I started reading, I was like, cool. Plot, straight to the point. Didn't waste any time on fluff. With two main characters in the beginning, I would have liked to know more about both. But that is neither here nor there.
The story starts out interesting enough to keep my focus. Want to know what is going to happen next.
I am not giving away any spoilers here, but, boom! Love interest comes on scene. Tall, good-looking…blah blah blah. At least that is what the author wants you to think. This story is far away from cliché, and I am glad. I continue to read.
By the time I get to the end of the story, I'm like, "Please let there be a sequel." Why would I say that? Ever been dropped off a cliff without knowing if you are going to land?
Well, that is the way that I felt at the end of this book. By the way it is good. However, the ending will leave you just pissed off. I kept swiping my phone going, this really can't be all. But it was.
The grammar was not professional editor standard, but it was almost flawless. The story keeps you engaged because you want to know what the hell is gonna happen next. For 21 chapters you are like cool…oh crap!...what the hell? Then the last chapter happens. A sequel has to come. Must come. Because the way this ends? It might have you throwing your phone across the room.
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